Changes & Improvements to 1st Draft/Edit

We were working alongside our initial story board to make our first draft, however, as we were fine editing and coming to stronger terms with the narrative we noticed that there were aspects we liked and also felt like that a few aspects needed to be changed. 

Strengths about 1st draft

• A range of shots used including: close ups, pans and low angles.
• Runs smoothly from start to finish.
• Clean dialogue, which provides an insight to the films narrative.
• There is an evident range in Mise-En-Scene used throughout. 

What needs to be improved

• In our draft, 'Title Here' is displayed rather than an actual title to our film, therefore, we need to come up with a title for our thriller film.
• The beginning shots (close ups/pans) are held for slightly too long. I think that the shots should only last for around 3 seconds each to conform to the conventions of the fast paced nature of a thriller film. 
• I feel like we should continue our sound track to underscore the dialogue, as there are some slightly awkward pauses between speech which is silent. Having the sound track underscore the dialogue would also add tension to the conversation and provide a sense of anxiousness. 
• There is a continuity error in the last shot our our draft; the door is shown being closed in the close up shot, however, in the long shot of myself & Hannah outside, the garage door is shown to be open. 

These improvements can be made when we visit the college again, on our several planned visits to edit and produce a final version of our film. Overall, we were happy with what we produced a a draft but looking at what needs to be improved, we feel like our final edit will be much better. 

Before we visit the college again, we also need to discuss and research ideas for the title of our film in order to be able to add all our titles such as, edited by and directed by in the opening of our film.